I have one comment: I was completely impressed and pleased.

Except for two eeny weeny things:

1. LOLLLOLOLOLOL NARCISSA BLACK LOOKS LIKE CRUELLA DeVIL WITH THAT HAIR OH MY GOD LOLOLOLOLOL

that kept me laughing through the scene, which was disappointing, and I thought of dear and how disappointed she'd probably be.

2. wtf was with incinerating the Burrow?!

and I have 2 favorite lines I can recall:

"And take Mr. Weasley with you, he looks far too happy over there."

and:

"What are these?"
*happily* "Dragon Balls!!"
"...." *vomits on Snape's Shoes*
Snape: D:

but the biggest laugh was Harry on Felix Felicus.